The Gloob Of Thannook 1, 2, 3, 5, 6, 4, 8 & SEVEN

[poohbcarrot]

[Tonyblack]

Oooh - I like that a lot!

It flows very nicely and paints a lot of great images. The style reminds me of Edward Lear, but that's not a criticism as I always liked Lear's work.

Very good Pooh!

[chris.ph]

very good pooh

and all spelling correct

[MattK]

Great poem, Pooh.
One thing I'm curious about though is this passage:

He lives in a castle
Surrounded by moat.
The only way in
Is by rowing his boat.
The castle is crumbly
With grounds quite extensive.
As you have guessed,
The upkeep's expensive.

Why doesn't he have a draw bridge? And if the moat is high enough that he can cross it by boat, wouldn't that mean that any potential attackers (like rabbits and whatnot to eat his vegetables) be able to do the same? That's just a poorly designed castle right there.

[Dotsie]

That's true. My rabbits love going out in their boat. What a plot hole!

I really liked it. Not looking forward to the sad one though, but that's life

[Batty]

I like The Gloob
And his naughty dog Scrunch
Their tale made me smile -
So Thanks a whole bunch!

I can't wait for the others! ... Well, obviously I'm going to have to ... You know what I mean ...

[poohbcarrot]

Why doesn't he have a draw bridge? And if the moat is high enough that he can cross it by boat, wouldn't that mean that any potential attackers (like rabbits and whatnot to eat his vegetables) be able to do the same? That's just a poorly designed castle right there.

Because I thought it was funny without a drawbridge.

[Batty]

Great poem, Pooh.
One thing I'm curious about though is this passage:

He lives in a castle
Surrounded by moat.
The only way in
Is by rowing his boat.
The castle is crumbly
With grounds quite extensive.
As you have guessed,
The upkeep's expensive.

Why doesn't he have a draw bridge? And if the moat is high enough that he can cross it by boat, wouldn't that mean that any potential attackers (like rabbits and whatnot to eat his vegetables) be able to do the same? That's just a poorly designed castle right there.

If the upkeep is expensive, then it is feasible that the Gloob could raise funds by holding rowing boat races for the villagers, or the 'fish a lucky plastic duck' competition like they have at fairgrounds.
The moat would therefore have to be accessible by boat.
The prized vegetables could always be protected by netting & other means.

The poem makes sense to me!

[Jan Van Quirm]

Hollywood pitch

"It's a bold sweeping landscape where Lear meets and admits to knowing Dodgson and the Grinch plays hide and seek around a moat whilst drowning Enid Blyton."

With a thousand elephants perhaps - later on?

Keep at it smartypants. You know you got it in you

[poohbcarrot]

If the upkeep is expensive, then it is feasible that the Gloob could raise funds by holding rowing boat races for the villagers, or the 'fish a lucky plastic duck' competition like they have at fairgrounds.
The moat would therefore have to be accessible by boat.
The prized vegetables could always be protected by netting & other means.

Sheesh! I don't know! I only was injecting a bit of economic reality into the story. How does Noddy pay for the petrol for his car?

He doesn't need to raise any more cash, because he makes enough from selling his fruit and veg.

So there!!

The next chapter is called "BOOKS".

[Tina a.k.a.SusanSto.Helit]

you mustn't feel pressured to make fiction make sense... otherwise twould be Non-Fiction and you would have to bring in the bean counters.

I like it and found it entertaining. Thank you Pooh... I still secretly want to spank you, but I am restraining meself, you still need (or perhaps just desire) a good swat... :slightly evil grin:

[chris.ph]

and tina is off again

[poohbcarrot]

[bikkit]

[Tonyblack]

Excellent!

Seriously good and some very inventive rhymes in there - well done.