My Story: Dogcatchers

[Cheery]

This made me laugh as well!

“Name’s Brent. But you can call me Bob, if it’s all the better to you. You can choose.” Why?

I guess because he's fed up with people barking "Who are you?" in a very unfriendly tone and had fun confusing Boxer.

One positive thing I'd like to say is that it's very easy to read. It's more-ish (as in, you want to read more).

And I want to write more.

[chris.ph]

tell pooh that he is not marking essays in school, its a story for us to enjoy

[Sjoerd3000]

I enjoyed it a lot it´s a good read When is part 3 coming out??

[Cheery]

I don't know... Two or three weeks? I'm very slow at my story, because I have LOTS of other hobbies and not enough free time for all of them ... But I'll try to at least stay under three weeks, if that's okay.

[chris.ph]

no pressure but hurry up

[Cheery]

no pressure but hurry up

Glad you liked it, Chris!

[Tina a.k.a.SusanSto.Helit]

In between hobbies, apprenticeships and all, just to let you know... I saw your picture and you are an adorable young woman. Tis true, don't bother to deny it. I am sure we all agree. :smug:

[Sjoerd3000]

:shock: I don't know... Two or three weeks? I'm very slow at my story, because I have LOTS of other hobbies and not enough free time for all of them ... But I'll try to at least stay under three weeks, if that's okay.

That long Can't you speed up a little
(only joking take all the time you need , but hurry up a bit )

[Cheery]

:shock: I don't know... Two or three weeks? I'm very slow at my story, because I have LOTS of other hobbies and not enough free time for all of them ... But I'll try to at least stay under three weeks, if that's okay.

That long Can't you speed up a little
(only joking take all the time you need , but hurry up a bit )

One at a time.
I first have to think of what I'll write next! And I'm planning on doing some "Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy" fanart an I'm currently learning how to play blues . As I said... I have too many hobbies.
But since I have quite a long way to go on the train at mornings (an hour in total with changing trains once) I'll have enough time to write before school at least
So I think that'll make it up a bit.

[Cheery]

In between hobbies, apprenticeships and all, just to let you know... I saw your picture and you are an adorable young woman. Tis true, don't bother to deny it. I am sure we all agree. :smug:

You can't believe how I'm blushing right now
Thank you Tina! :hugs:

[poohbcarrot]

So, what do you think about it so far?
Leave a comment, tell me how you like it, and, this is very important, tell me if something's wrong or if I could do something better, PLEEEEEEEEEASE!

Just saying the story's great isn't what Cheery wants. She wants constructive criticism to make the story better. Just saying the story is great, implies the story is perfect. It isn't. I think it's the best she's written so far, but it isn't perfect. However, I think this part is infinitely more readable than the original first letter from Aurora.

Cheery, if you want, I'll re-read it properly then send you a pm.

[Cheery]

So, what do you think about it so far?
Leave a comment, tell me how you like it, and, this is very important, tell me if something's wrong or if I could do something better, PLEEEEEEEEEASE!

Just saying the story's great isn't what Cheery wants. She wants constructive criticism to make the story better. Just saying the story is great, implies the story is perfect. It isn't. I think it's the best she's written so far, but it isn't perfect. However, I think this part is infinitely more readable than the original first letter from Aurora.

Cheery, if you want, I'll re-read it properly then send you a pm.

Yes, please! I've showed it to a couple of people at home too and they're always afraid of insulting me if they criticize it.
I'm happy if someone criticizes my story, that means I can improve it. My goal is to firstly end the story and then take a chance at sending the script to a publisher. Wouldn't be good if it was full of flaws, would it?