My Story: Dogcatchers

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Postby Jan Van Quirm » Sun Jul 26, 2009 2:13 pm

Not if it's your own thoughts you're editing.... :P Just the title I meant.

Some of my thoughts are well worth burning but luckily my memory's not so good these days so I can't remember what I said anyway :roll:
"Some men see things as they are and ask why. Others dream things that never were and ask why not.” George Bernard Shaw
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Postby Cheery » Fri Jul 31, 2009 11:27 am

Phew! I've finished the first part, and I'm so happy the story is working. I've posted it on deviantArt, so I've decided to only post the link to the different parts, so I don't have to repeat the whole procedure of posting, editing and so on, afterwards. It's just easier for me, and I don't have to break up the story into smaller parts.

So, the firts part of my story (Another change of name. :oops: It's called "Dogcatchers" now) you can find here

EDIT: introducing Delbert, just for pooh :wink:
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Postby Jan Van Quirm » Fri Jul 31, 2009 4:59 pm

He'll be unmanageable if you spoil him too much Cheery - I'm not sure I approve! :wink:
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Postby Cheery » Fri Jul 31, 2009 6:05 pm

Don't worry, he won't be spoiled! (This is still the first part, anyway. A lot can happen)
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Postby poohbcarrot » Fri Jul 31, 2009 11:30 pm

Yippee! Delbert's back!! :lol:
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Postby Tonyblack » Sat Aug 01, 2009 6:20 am

poohbcarrot wrote:Yippee! Delbert's back!! :lol:
:shock: Is he a zombie now?
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Postby poohbcarrot » Sat Aug 01, 2009 12:34 pm

Ooh! Good story line. Were-cats and zombies. Can the zombie have a love affair with the were-cat? :lol:
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Postby chris.ph » Sat Aug 01, 2009 3:06 pm

you want to read gils allfright diner a vamp falls for a ghost in that :lol:
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Postby Batty » Sat Aug 01, 2009 6:07 pm

chris.ph wrote:you want to read gils allfright diner a vamp falls for a ghost in that :lol:

Does it end with a phantom pregnancy??
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Postby Tina a.k.a.SusanSto.Helit » Sat Aug 01, 2009 6:11 pm

chris.ph wrote:you want to read gils allfright diner a vamp falls for a ghost in that :lol:


That author is wonderful. I have a couple of his books and am a member of his website. hmmm, now that is going to drive me nuts until I remember his blasted name.

Edit: Aha A. Lee Martinez
Aha! So, Bob's yer uncle... very clever.
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Postby Cheery » Thu Aug 20, 2009 7:16 pm

Okay, Part number two is finally finished! I'm so glad I tell you, that part was really difficult! (Fight scenes: ARRRGH!)
And here it is!!
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Postby Cheery » Fri Aug 21, 2009 3:53 pm

So, what do you think about it so far?
Leave a comment, tell me how you like it, and, this is very important, tell me if something's wrong or if I could do something better, PLEEEEEEEEEASE!
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Postby poohbcarrot » Fri Aug 21, 2009 4:03 pm

I've just read the first two sentences and laughed. :lol: Was that intentional?

"A little way further down the road stood a silent bystander, watching the scene with big interest. Two bystanders in fact, and for some very odd reason, nobody had noticed them." (the writer included hadn't even noticed them! :lol: )
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Postby Cheery » Fri Aug 21, 2009 4:08 pm

poohbcarrot wrote:I've just read the first two sentences and laughed. :lol: Was that intentional?

"A little way further down the road stood a silent bystander, watching the scene with big interest. Two bystanders in fact, and for some very odd reason, nobody had noticed them." (the writer included hadn't even noticed them! :lol: )


Well the writer in that case is the creator, thus; He (or she) sees them. The writer is always the higher being, watching everything and everybody, without being watched. Simple, isn't it? :lol:

And I've never looked at it like this... You really made me laugh! :lol:
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Postby poohbcarrot » Fri Aug 21, 2009 4:25 pm

This made me laugh as well! :lol:

“Name’s Brent. But you can call me Bob, if it’s all the better to you. You can choose.” Why?

One positive thing I'd like to say is that it's very easy to read. It's more-ish (as in, you want to read more).
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