Sorry yes I realised that but didn't answer it too well -
I think really it's not something you can be too rigid with although in general it's always best to avoid anything that's too hackneyed/corny. Sue's a published author (with a co-writer, not very populist but good, cerebral classic fantasy) and a member of the Tolkien Society a well as a career librarian so she's really well-placed to do editorials. As a writer she's learned by her own mistakes (experience is always superior to theory) and she's been there, seen it, done it with cliches and superfluous adjectives and adverbs. What she does with me mainly is keep my eyes nose and words on the ball and story by keeping it simple and honest and if anything light on detail where it takes you away from point of scene or the exchange etc.
She's generally right and I would never try to get something as crass as
'Today is a good day to die!' past her in context let alone as a battle cry in or out of fantasy
If you're interested in objective reviews and editorials for your fanfic of whatever genre then you're welcome to drop by
HEREon DreamWorlds

It's kind of sleepy in that actual thread but the whole forum's geared towards more interactive and creative fandom pursuits with an over-18's cloistered section that isn't wall to wall smut (my adult writing tends to horror/violence rather than sex

) and you'll find some familiar faces over there as well, so it won't just be me (I do do practical reviews/editorials for people with my mod's hat on regardless of genre

) and Sue's on there too (as Saranna) although these days she's pretty busy writing again herself.
